song beggining

I think that the words you used were fitting. I give it an 8 or 9. But I guess it depends on what the tune to the song is, is it fast paced, a normal speed, or slow?

is this the next part of your previous lyrics?

My life is a mess, I cant find where im going , if its up or its down..I’ve serched all ar-ound. so im up in the clounds looking over ci-tys trying to find my wa-ay roundd…

oh eh, oh, eh oh.

Life is a whirpool , a marry go round..im looking for my luv, oh luv. im only chasin my tail like a dog does triple, bfore settling down, oh settlin down-own-own.

I am in a mess-ess-es and im looking fo-or my luv, I am in a mess-ess-es and im lost in my head. where did he go, there or there, saw him only yesterday, but he never notices me ,im lost in a yander tree. so help me know, im stuck without a heading, is it up or it down, im stuck upsidedown.

for, blacksugar: nice interpretation of your own life. I don’t know if your saying your life is bullsh*t or saying everyone elses life is better… but either way no one thinks their life is perfect and im sure someone else is saying what you said about themselves and saying your the one with the “great life”.

from yours truly, I3ig_Al

I can certainly tell you that my life isnt a rainbow… its more like falling in a black hole, landing on a ledge, the ledge breaks, and then it repeats and all the while im looking up at the bright light and every time I get close to it I fall down again ect. but if your describing someone elses life then its very good

I think it is really generic and you need to make a song that has a wide vocab but not crazy but so it makes sense

well im trying to say life is not always perfect and if you try to live it good then ya.

normal

10 very good