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How can I rewrite this sentence so that it doesn't contain so many commas?

“As you can see, living in the city, as opposed to the country, can save you money, time, and even your life.”

I think it has way to many commas, but I am unsure of how to write it without them.

I need help ASAP, I am writing an essay.

Thanks in advance!

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Answer #1

Is this better? Or, correct?

“So, as you can see, living in the city rather than the country can save you money, time, and even save your life.”

Answer #2

As you can see, living in the city - as opposed to the country - can save you money, time, and even your life. ~or~ Living in the city, as opposed to the country, can save you money, time, and even your life. ~or~ Living in the city (as opposed to the country) can save you money, time, and even your life.

Is the “As you can see” part important? It just seems like extra words.

Answer #3

Thanks Colleen. I put “As you can see” as a transition phrase at the beginning of my conclusion paragraph. However, I removed it and I finally settled with this conclusion: “In conclusion, the city has much more to offer than the country. You have easy access to transportation, local shopping and dining, and quick emergency services. Living in the city rather than the country can save you money, time, and even save your life. “

Answer #4

Put Semi Colon After See.. And Money Then After The Word Time

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