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what // Hey, guys, help me with my rap text, please?

well, native speakers, can you check if everything is clear. even if there is not much sense lol. any comments/correcions appreciated.

I’m back, not risen. My heart is still beating it’s rythm. Like cretinizm My thoughts And I can’t cope with’em. I hate this drizzle It flays My sneakers and face. Where is the blizzard To hide that I fizzled away.

I’m just not a native speaker so I may mistake. thanx

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Answer #1

Ok hm. ‘rythm’ is spelled rhythm. And for the third line the word cretinizm, I think that was supposed to be cretinism. It was good, you had a few spelling errors, but I thought the message was clear and it was very creative if you actually look beyond the meaning. It was good. :)

Answer #2

thanx a lot again. i do appreciate ur help. if u need any advice, let me know))

Answer #3

It’s no problem. :)

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