Can you rate the text of my rap song?

Please tell me how do you like the text of my new rap song. I would appreciate if you tell me if there is something wrong with grammar or sense is not clear. I’m not a native speaker so I need YOUR help.

Making a pause Ain’t gonna restore what I’ve lost. You won’t take the source And build another release. I can’t find the reason Can you? - tell me if there is - For belief you’re still in love. I can’t stand like this.

I got a dream That no one can ever trim. Not about you Like at first it could seem. I got a choice And a got a head and my voice. And I will move on. You won’t see me scream.

She is so nice, But I still can not break the ice. I can’t take my eyes Watching her sitting across. Everyone Calls me dumb, But I look for a cause Touch you one more time Like a lovely blossom.

Thank you

Answer #1

‘And a got a head and my voice.’ Was the first a supposed to be an ‘I’? That line didn’t make sense. I think it was a typo, but not sure.

Well I liked it, and ‘can not’ is spelled as cannot. Good job. :)

Answer #2

That’s really awesome!!!

Answer #3

thank you. yeah I misspelled it. thans a lot

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