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Emo poem

Take a knife and cut me up If you hate me, you won’t stop make me feel the pain within as your slitting through my skin makes me weaker as I bleed for your mercy make me plead hear me screaming in the dark as you leave your painfull mark blood is running down my face as my beauty you erase trying to cut through every vein on your shirt your leaving stains I wish you knew I didnt care if you hurt me everywhere you can slit my skin apart but you cant cut through my broken heart.

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Answer #1

This is absolutely awful.

It’s not awful because it’s about violence, it’s awful because it’s cliche and has absolutely no substance. It’s about nothing, and it doesn’t even express it’s pointless subject in a meaningful way.

That said, don’t give up.

Answer #2

WoW!! That’s really good!!! you shudd b a song writter or sumthin you have talent!! Really good job!! :)

Answer #3

seriously your really good I love it!!!

Answer #4

pretty graphic if you ask me. That’s an understatement, actually!

Answer #5

your poem was really great. that’s now one of my favorite poems.

Answer #6

wow this is awesome…u have got talent boy

Answer #7

its a good poem, deff. emo. yeahhh kinda graphic, but still good.

Answer #8

ever watched the movie “awake”? my god! your poem gave me flash backs to some of the scenes! keep up the good work =]

Answer #9

I love it =D

its not graphic I don’t know what yall are talken about lol

Answer #10

Make some music to go along with that and and add a chorus… lots of emo bands would dig that shite!!

Answer #11

U ever listened to The Used? Reminded me of there song “Im A Fake” Good stuff though man

Answer #12

that was good!

Answer #13

that was beautiful!!! omgz you rilly got some skill!

Answer #14

I loves that poem a lot I;m so jeolous just kidding lol

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