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This is my poem for you

This is my poem for you I cant explain my reasons for loving you All I know Is my heart burns for you Tears fill my eyes at the thought of losing you And as chessy as it may be Your like my dream come true My reasons for loving you Cannot be explained I guess it’s cause you been there through the hard times And made me laugh through the pain I’ve always loved you for that “go ahead, you can cry” Is something I will never forget I guess you can say I love you Because you were my best friend first And even though we did have some hard times We always made it work If you were to give me a book And tell me to write why I love you You’d get back a full book Full of blank pages Because Your love is indescribable … You know im shy So this is not easy to do But you mean the world to me And thats why I love you

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Answer #1

Its a really good message, and you had some great lines but all together- it seems like it needs more ‘flow’. I didnt really feel the love you have for this person. I know you said you cant describe it, but the reader still wants to feel it. Remember- I’m no expert, this is just my opinion.

Answer #2

It’s good, but to me your poem kind of sounds like a mental break down. There’s a difference between a love poem and a obsessIon. I don’t know if you noticed but in a lot of love storys when 2 people fall in love with the same person they make the bad guy with alittle obsession. Ya you don’t want that.. In my view anyway.

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