What - do you think this is alright for my RE homework?

Do you think this is ok for my RE homework which was to write a poem about the holocaust, I think it’s repeating itself a bit.

Children treated as adults, never got to eat split from their families and they kept getting beat no one bothered to scream or shout or they would only get kicked people working really hard not even getting paid all their family could of died they wouldn’t even know gas chambers or actual showers no one could ever tell which was which the people who did this are such a witch.

Answer #1

It’s very impersonal…

Have you tried writing it from the point of view as a holocaust survivor? That would give an element of emotion, at least.

Answer #2

Could be better… but for your age id say its fine… Xo:)

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