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What do you think of my story?
Ok, so im writing a story about a girl who cuts herself, and I know its a little… Deep, but stories like this really get to me. I have the beginning, but I just need to see if it’s good enought to finish. Thanks, and sorry, I’m a really bad writer lol
I pushed the sleeve of my hoodie up, breathing deeply. Slowly my hand moved across my wrist, the red line growing bigger and bigger. Tears of blood dripped onto the carpet, the red soaking into the deep brown fabric. My heart was beating faster, adrenaline pumping through me. It feels good, the blade dragging down my arm, feeling my skin slowly open up, the faint sting. After slowly making 3 lines I replace my ‘weapon’ back into my dresser, grab the towel next to me, and wipe up the blood on my arm. Shiny blood smears across the skin. I walk to my bathroom, wet the towel a bit, and clean up my crimson-stained skin. Throwing the towel into the basket, I pull down my sleeve, and walk back to my room. I stare at myself in the mirror for a few minutes, looking at the hideous thing I am… Okay, I cannot look in the mirror anymore. It makes me want to hit myself… (then it goes on for a bit, but it’s boring)
So what do you think of it? Please be honest. Thanx!
It’s good. How about doing a twist in the story, so that the reader finds out half way through that something tragic happened in the cutter’s life to make them life that? Like, a family member dying, being raped (subject to gender), heartbreak or some other tragic event. ♥
omg I love it please finish it I WANT TO READ THE REST!!!1
I like it :) very deep.
Very deep and if you think its boring add something unique to it. Also you can have a reason why a girl is cutting her self(abuse etc.). I like to write too and I do have problem with if I think it’s good too. I ask for advice but in the end I end up going with what I think is right for my story :)(Sorry Im pretty sure i’m going off topic.) But Nice Story.
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