How can I make this poem better, and what are your thoughts on it?

its really good.i see nohing wrong with it.(:

Thanks :) Aha, Oh well, spelling errors happen alot to me xD Just goes to show no one can copyright it. Its not so powerful as one of my other pieces. I was gonna put that one there too , but I lost it D: And thank you very much again..

Thanks ! :) Aha, I passed it in as a English poem, I got 100 on it xD. I thought it kinda sucked, so I wanted some more opions…. Thanks again :)

I hear voices in the night Voices of those that have passed Their lips curve to form smiles Though not kind if asked Their ice cold fingers brush against my skin Leaving me enveloped by their chill

I once again lose the sight of sleep As I listen to their whispers I lay still,frozen by fear My parents are oblivious As I silently yell I am in the deepest depths of my own personal hell

The voices that I’ve come to know, better than my own Send shivers down my spine As I am chilled to the bone Their presence lingers Our souls blend into one I am embraced by pain And embraced by loss

Their hearts are cold and unbeating Hearts that know no love As they seek for the revenge they thirst My life will be stolen first Then forced to join their world of haunting A world filled with revenge and hate A world that I have feared Will become my fate

wow.. Thats .. insanlly good. howeverr, everyone would know I failed to write it, as it is far beyond my level, and I’m only 13.

thanks(:

deep……….

thanks :)