My Horrible Poem.

The love I had It is now gone Away from me I have no love none to give! you took it! all of it! my love I gave you, you betrayed my love now this life it isn’t worth living sort of like my love that faded just like that this love is dead along with this life and this life died Why? because of you!

Answer #1

thats good are you really emo?

Answer #2

You are trying to beone of these profetional poets but its just not working. This poem needs some work.

Answer #3

Definatly needs some polishing - you should try getting a thesaurus and learning how to use metaphors a little more to give your poems more depth. Keep on writing though! Everythings takes time to get better!

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