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Why does it hurt? Every time our gazes meet, My heart breaks in half! I loved him like no other! He was the one. I ponder everyday of what could’ve happend. He broke my heart. He’s all I can think about at night. All I have to do is close my eyes, And there he is. He’s as damned as he seems. It’s like if I tired to save him again, My world would cave in! If I could’ve held on to is laughter, His love and his care. I might not be this disaster. He’s soft to the touch and easy on the eyes. He’s so beautiful, Yet shuch a beautiful diaster. His eyes so green, His hairso brown, His smile so soft, His laugh so gentle, He doesn’t know the pain I feel inside! My heart has stopped beating, My laughter only outward. I’m crying inside, And he can’t save me now! My eyes filled with hope and my heart filled with fear! I put on this smile, So he cant see, The pain I feel inside of me. As he walks by me my eyes fill with tears, Knowing that the next time we meet, My heart will fill with fear! Put on a smile, Eyes filled with hope, For another gloomy day, In this lost boat!!!

Xoxox emo_gurl…

Any comments hit me up!!!

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Answer #1

That’s not true. Many people ( like my maths teacher ) don’t like Shakespeare, but that’s not saying his poems weren’t any good. And if someone presented a really bad poem to their friends, and their friends said it was good, but it clearly wasn’t worth reading, would their positive comments make it worthwhile poetry? I don’t think so…

Answer #2

Why does everyone think this poem is good?! It’s nothing less than mediochre, if not no good at all.

Answer #3

Why aren’t there this many responses for my poems? I think you should slow down on the exclaimation points ( a good poem wouldn’t need exclamation marks to add emotion, the reader should be able to pick it up.) Also, although poetry needn’t rhyme, there does need to be a detectable rhythm or structure.

Answer #4

OMG thats the best poem ever you really have a gift keep writing its the only way to get the feelings out trust me… Very good poem

Answer #5

You’re great. Don’t pay attention to the insults. They be hatin’. =p

Answer #6

lemme rephrase… if the majority of the intended audience… likes it =P

Answer #7

awww its so cute!!! I love it…what happened because I asume that there is some meaning behind it!!! so did you see mine that I just put up todayish

Answer #8

lol yeah you got a gift for writing keep it up!!!

Answer #9

iamcool - well if people like it, thats what makes it good

Answer #10

lol hey yall… I have a couple of any ones comeing.. but they are a bit different!!!

Answer #11

this poem iz is like no other poem I ever heard I like it

Answer #12

thanx again for the support.. LOL :) and dont’e hate the player hate the game!!

Answer #13

I like it :-) you are really good at writing poems

Answer #14

is’t really good but if he was the one he would not have broken your heart

Answer #15

man your awesome at writing

Answer #16

your great at writing peoms I luv it sis:)

Answer #17

wow.. speechless your really talanted O_O

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