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“Horrible Life” My name is Ashley I was only 12, That’s when “HE” walked out the door, Said “HE” would come visit every week, But “HE” didn’t, that’s why my heart would leak, Said “HE” would bring money for my sis and I, Knowing that smirk I knew it was a Lie, “HE” used to love us I don’t know if he still does, It wonders inside me like a hard shove, “You” said you were a man & and would never run out your home, Now you left my mom struggling on her own, She has now moved on and found a new love, Someone to love her like he still does, So now we’ve moved on, with our lives, Because if we didn’t, it would stab like a knife, All this anger comes from you and your ways, I shall get over it day by day, I will stop this entire non-sense cry, Until I get a nice apologize. AshleyLatriceCushenberry 5:45a.m. March7,2009

Answer #1

awww,thats so sad hun,im realy sorry.my ‘father’abandoned us when I was 7 so I know what its like.I hope you find love where he denyed you it,and peace of mind where he tried to take it away.god bless. and yeah its a good poem.prob because you mean every word:( best of luck,and remember:keep moving forward and dont look back.its how you find peace. beag xxx

Answer #2

I think it’s pretty good - you ought to get it published

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