How: my poem, awaken?

you turn your blue eye like the ocean, away from me in a slow-thought motion the eyes cry; pain from a sad girl he was the oyster as you were the pearl nobody took notice, the world busy in commotion, and you broke away, a sudden cracked emotion.

the essence of break up break off break away clean cut hurt screeching agony taking herself to a new place start over, a new world a new face.

awaken.

Answer #1

I’m glad to hear the news! Usually I write poems in 10 seconds and people like them but my last poem was a total crappy one :P Ack we all have our bad moments so thank you so much!!

Answer #2

again I like your style a lot :)

Answer #3

all I can say is wow (: really well done its amazingg

Answer #4

That poem was amazing you have a real talent :)

Answer #5

beautiful

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