Does this sound like a good book

The idea itself is okay, I guess. You general writing skill is very high, and now you are at a point where your writing takes shape, MAJOR changes that make your writing not just good, but AMAZING. Write now you are adding a lot of details, and that is good. Except the way the details are written are unrealistic, to a certain point. 5,034 “ums” ? hmm… It’s almost as if you are trying to hard, it seems. So I want you to write really fast all your ideas whatever comes to mind that sounds good and inspiring. if it comes to mind and you think it’s bad, write it down anyways. ummm like this is an idea I have right now, I’ll use that as an example:

the fair world is the title and it is meant to be ironic because the world is not fair it is the future it is meant to slap people in the face and show them a future that could be true if they did not do something about it, it is meant to show people that others can be happy in a sad future and it is extremely possible to be happy with what you have, to think that you have enough and you would be even happier with less, and to show a different world a different end that is what it would be like, in the fair world.

okay now you try it :D!!

I enjoy reading books so it’s great that you’re writing one.

Please write more so I can rate…like a few more lines just type away.

More from clock world Rachel sat at her desk fiddling with a few rubber bands . She wasn’t paying attention to Mr Green, his lecture on morals in society was a regular and besides that he used the word umm so much that it was almost imposible to know what he was saying. Poor Mr Green apparently Vanessa had been tallying up how many times he had said um in the past 8 mins , the total was 5034 and counting.