Do you like this song I wrote?

I dunno, I can’t hear it in my head… Record it and then ask when we can hear it. No one knows exactly how you’re singing or delivering these lyrics so no one understands it. And don’t get discouraged… my first song SUCKED!!! it was so embarasing, and I’m still doing music years later and I’m much improved. goto my homepage and listen to some of my music.

little song writing advice;

they need to be short and sweet with catchy chorus’s

it looks like it could be a very good song ; its geting the point across I could help you make it better or more PAZAAMM!!

funmail me or IM me on AIM [ blastitlouderx3] we can talk about this. [ don’t listen to the gay fagtards saying it sucks, its very hard 2 write songs and I think you need a decent job…don’t give up; just think alittle more. I listen to other songs for inspiration ]

OmfG!!! I think it was a story about a Cinderella

Wow, it looks like too much detail for a song.

it doesnt flow…

it’s too detailed…

its not a song…

its a short story…

of your life…

Ouch. lol you guys are preety cruel?? lmao

its a bit 2 much

thats a song?

well. its not very good. try again.

I think you got somethin there,, but waayyy 2 much detail, and you say “because” a lot. keep workin =]