do you like this?

Do you like this poem my friend wrote? tell me your opinions on it.

  DEAF

Look at that boy! he can’t even hear me. Look, boy! don’t come near me. But inside that boy lies something worlds aparts, for my boy, It is his heart

Answer #1

Better than most of the poetry posted on here. This sounds more like a possible pop song though. I would avoid the repetitive rhyming, its boring. Also you need better word choice. Think more creatively. I definitely like the attitude of this poem though, its refreshing.

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