Crying black

This one is dedicated towards my dad and his worthless girlfriend heres to you old man.

Cryinb black I look at you and my eyes swelldo full with tears When I cry for you The tears come out black All ‘cause your not listening Come to me And try to understand why they are black Stop slow down Come listen to me please Now my tear will always stay black

Comments or advice please thnks Emodancer ;););););););););););););););)

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Answer #1

okay your good. really. but id say add more to it..dont repeat the same things over and over again (as I have noticed in this poem and on the other one)

Answer #2

AWESOME!!! :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)!!!

Answer #3

what a great poem I feel lke I can relate to it

Answer #4

Honestly, I don’t think this is very good. It has no depth, and makes almost no use of any literary devices.

There is no new idea here, and you don’t say anything.

Answer #5

I am working on a new poem I will write it in another question so tell me what you think ok? :)

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