Can I say like this in my song?

Well, I’m a writing a song and I’m not sure if I can say “a pack of cigarettes has been smokeN”. How does it sound if I say like this? Is it absolutely incorrect or it sounds fine?

Answer #1

‘smoken’ sounds like slang for ‘smoking,’ which would give me as a listener the impression that cigarettes were smoking.

You’re better off using ‘smoked’ and rewriting that line.

Answer #2

“smoken” sounds like slang for “smoking,” which would give me as a listener the impression that cigarettes were smoking.

You’re better off using “smoked” and rewriting that line.

Answer #3

dangersteve, thanks a lot for the answer!!

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