Blue and icey - opinions?

I am a girl with ice blue eyes My hair is ragged and I want to cry I look for you and you look for me And all that I hear is who the h**l is she? I turn to you for the help I crave But your not there and I want to be saved I look around at the darkend faces All staring a me with pure full hatred I say don’t And they ask why I turn away and begin to cry Their eyes are sadened by what they see And then they are there comforting me I look for you but your no where around And my icey blue eyes go straight to the ground Then out of no where your there beside me And my face in your hands you start to kiss me I look at you and then look away And soon as I’ve done this we’re on our way My face is so golden now with the love from yours We walk together forever more The end:)

Please leave any comments that you would like to and I would love to hear if I should get theses few that I have already written published. Thanks again

Emodancer