What do you people think of this poem I made up?

My hands are shaking My lips are dry I bite my tongue Trying hard not to cry Ilook onto the battlefield Were warm blood has been shed I think of these people and all they did But the tthanks they get is being dead. And as I sigh and turn away, I think of all I did that day. I saved a man, And shot one too But why does it matter, Why do I feel blue? Im walking away through bloodstained heaps, Then it hit me, Then I knew. For one day soon… Ill die too.

Answer #1

I absolutely, positively, definately love it!!! You have talent and a lot of it!! WEll done. 10/10, 5 stars. never seen better!! it captured me from the first few lines. Very emotional and love the beginning, middle and end. Oh hell, I love it all!

If you want, join my group called story time. if you want to get in, you need to prove it by masterpieces, and you have succeeded with flying coulours!!

Well done!

Answer #2

I love it!!!

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