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poem bout how im feelin, comments?

Some thoughts are better kept to oneself And this may fall under that catagory But the more that I keep to myself The more that I seem to disintegrate Into nothing A different part of me is lost With every night I spend Clawing at the inside of my skull At a point I need to decide Which is more important My need to feel loved Or my sanity For if I work toward one I will lose the other The never ending Hell that is not knowing What will happen next Is what tears me apart Is what destroys my ability To think logically And if that is not enough It’s invaded my dreams My subconscience that supposed to be My private escape form the trials of this world So I’ve lost logic Sanity And my subconscience To this mind-devouring disease This killer of basic instinct If I didn’t already fear this disease Could follow me to Hell I’d already be there With a blood stain on my shirt And with one bullet hole in my soul And one in my head

im really feelin this way right now, so please don’t be too harsh in your critiques, but be honest

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I really like it. It’s kind of a view on the darker side of ones emotions. I think you are talented! I’m sorry you feel that way but I know also what it is like to be swallowed by the monster that is the insane desire to be liked and the intense fear of being alone

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