What do you think of my poem?

I sit in my room crying And nobody knows I just keep on lying And everyone believes this smile They say they love me I know its not true If only they could see What they’ve done to me

just something I came up with…sorry if it sucks

Answer #1

thts actually really good x

Answer #2

love it! its awesome!

Answer #3

Add a melody and you might just have a hit song ! You did a wonderful job.

Answer #4

Being as I’m a writer, I’m going to give you constructive criticism.

It’s a little boring. I feel it does not have a lot of depth. (Keep in mind I have no clue how old you are, or what this poem is about.) I feel that it seems like something I wrote when I was 13. Just try adding some more depth to your next piece.

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