What do you think of this poem?

falling faster sinking lower quick sand captures me by the ankles and pulls me down im drowning in tears and suffercating myself in the darkness my open veins let me breath allow me to see into the night but then I bleed my blood flows like untamed waters I fall limp my visions blurred no one can save me now im untouchable defeated by my own sins crushed by my fears I lay on the cold wooden floor crying, slowly dieing until I can see no more

Answer #1

It’s a little dark I must say, but it seems very emotional.

Answer #2

It’s sufocating, not suffercating. Personally, I don’t like poems of thath type, but yours is an exception.

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