A child abuse poem I wrote.. What do yeh think??

I lay on the floor, staring at my door. Overwhelmed with fear, I wondered what’s next.

I heard the footsteps, closer and closer it was. The door banged open. I crawled weakly away.

A belt in your hand, I screamed in pain. You threw me against the wall I crumpled to the floor.

You screamed and yell, I’m living in a hell. I cried out in fright. It rings out through the night.

Years passes by, I’m a all grown woman now. The beast is old and weak. I lay by his side as he took his last breath.

I stood in the centre of world I heard the cries of the others. Will you save their soul or will you just leave it be.

Answer #1

AMAZING!!!

Answer #2

holy christmas sexy christel no one can beat that poem winnner!

Answer #3

its a good story. good poem, but why dont you try rhyming more? it would make your good poem into a great one… keep it your own though! dont change the story line!

Answer #4

omg thats great!!

Answer #5

Omg your poem was excellent…as I was reading it, could actually visualise your story telling, well done :)

Answer #6

o my gosh. that is amazing and you are so good.bravo

Answer #7

It’s good, I like it.

Answer #8

don’t know why you wrote it, but it’s great! :)

Answer #9

BRAVO BRAVO,Simply awesome,I want to write this as a song for sure!

Answer #10

really good poem x

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