What do you think of this song me and my bestfriends wrote?

Verse 1 The ultimate disappointment is that my heart is bleeding for you I cant look at myself in the mirror Because only pain remains The delusion of you not being here haunts my thoughts Pain is a killer, faith is a lie faded within the tears I cry

Chorus The dark truth hides beneath my shadow You cant see the pain pierced in my heart When insecurity hits me, I fall apart Cant you see we’re meant to be? X2

Verse 2 When you stabbed my heart Everything tore apart My heart melted with the feeling of you being there Showing that you really cared They all knew the truth but I was the last to know So many thoughts running in my mind that make me fall for you but I keep trying not to

(chorus)

Ending I believed you but I guess I was living a lie You used me .abused me ,beat me down and bruised me I tried so hard to me perfect but nothing was worth it As time passes I realized how blind I was You took control,covered my senses and all I did was wait for you The time has passed now I’m forgetting you but not the time With a pale face and wet lips I kiss you goodbye never to come Back

Answer #1

T_T IMTS AWESOME!!!

Answer #2

I like it but you need to put if you’re supposed to sing it slow or fast at certain parts but the whole concept and lyrics of the song are VERY well written. Love, iluvbabies28

Answer #3

like it nice song

Answer #4

ITS KINDA GUD I don’t know DA MELODY SOO I CNT BE SURE

Answer #5

Not bad

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