What do you think of my poem for my girlfriend?

Im not realy a poem writher and it sounds a bit… but my girlfriend loves stuff like this… so here I go…

Called:

Twist of fait

Since the day we met I was convinced we were friends Yet I sure wasn’t upset to accept what cupid recomends

I’ve known you for a while and I have gotten use to your style

but I have to confess you caught me by suprise when you invited me on a quest I see now, it was a blessing in disguise

For every moment we spend together You make me feel lighter than a feather

but I find myself alone again… apparently your on vacation I pray to the lord and count to ten and get so excited when my phone makes a vibration

all I can think of, is the day you arrive. again only then, will I become alive…

because there is something I need to tell you Apon the moment you greet me… your my lovely little hunny boo and baby… you complete me!

…its about how we became boyfriend and girlfriend lol…

Answer #1

not realy I was bored and only made it today befor going out

Answer #2

Good job man… Ever think of making a song out of it?

Answer #3

awww its cute. I like it.

Answer #4

Its beautiful! Very thoughtful and has a good rhyme and style to it :)

Answer #5

Its lovely and it wouldnt matter if it was lame bacause its the thought that counts, most boys wouldnt even think of attempting it

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