What do you think of my poem?

This is like the first one I have ever written and is something I would like to practice. Does it make sense to you? I would really appreciate your opinion :) Thanks in advance!

Skin warming from the Sun’s embrace; A pathless forest to leave no trace.

Green mattress so soft with blades that round; Breezes that flow through her soul so sound.

Wilderness mind like the knots of a vine; Displacing those thoughts into something divine.

Answer #1

Your words are beautiful. But when you put them all together…they don’t make any sense. Breezes that flow through her soul so sound ?? Beautiful words. They need to make sense.

Answer #2

I really like it.. it seems to have a deeper meaning than meets the eye. You should definitely write more! I would love to read them.

Answer #3

umm I liked it a lil. could be better. but its good. better than what I can write lol.

Answer #4

I get it. and its good. could be a little longer but I liked it.

Answer #5

its not that bad..it was nice..coulda been a bit longer tho :]

Answer #6

Ehh No .

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