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You Kill Me…

A love so strong The bond eternal Lasted so long Made void and null

It was perfect What I always dreamed I had you forever Or so it seemed

Then an end Unseen and abrupt Alright at first You would interrupt

Two of us broken Things uncovered Hearts spoken The bond severed

Already so difficult Emotions flared Made it impossible My heart so scared

I never wanted Things this way Not separated I wanted you to stay

I needed time You said okay Needed to find Why to stay

I found it But too late You found it Why to hate

We could’ve been The difference But instead The likeness

You and I Once in love The pain inside Love undone

The love I had Will always be Though not the same Inside of me

The pain instead The need for will Takes the place To stop the kill

A desire for love Once kept me sane Now only left The desire for pain

I want to forget Clear my heart The love we had Every single part

I can’t keep going Living like this Forever knowing What we had, I miss

I must escape I need to be free You hold me down You kill me…

Answer #1

again the short lines work wonders for you!!! that is so good, please put some put these in my group!?? It’s not just any old love/breakup crap, it’s way way way more. keep going with your work!

Answer #2

Brilliant.

Answer #3

wicked awesome!

Answer #4

I love it if you have more poems send them to me I also write poems Ill send you a few.

Answer #5

I LOVE IT!!! you should write a book lol

Answer #6

Wow, that was so well written. Each part, so real! Things We all have felt in the past or even in the present. Things we want to say but cant or are afraid of saying.

You are very talented…I hope you get your stuff published. good luck & hope to read more! Thank you so much for sharing.

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