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Lifted...
To a place where All the things I've longed to forget Fall off me like raindrops into puddles of honey, And in that instant I become weightless Lost in a moment Where time and space.. Forget who I am.
Until I'm reminded again
I like it! Do the puddles of honey symbolize anything in particular? If not, maybe you should change it to something like, "puddles beneath me"... you don't have to if you don't want, it's just a suggestion, I don't want to cramp your style or anything! :)
wow pretty good, I like its simplicity there's no problem with it but maybe you should make it a bit longer I little bit more emotion,but that's just my opinion other then that it's great
AWESOME JOB !!!
I agree, I was actually thinking the same thing. But then my mind went completely blank, and so I decided to stop. Maybe I'll continue some other time. Thank you though!
yes actually the puddles of honey are symbolic to something...
Is it personal, or would you mind telling me?
I like it :] very deep in a unique way
Not bad... very deep good
Its cute (:
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