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I wrote this last September.What do you think?

Dying Love Life is hard Life is tough So far My life has been rough

I think of you In these tough times And with your thoughts I write these rhymes

I think of you When Im sad Even though you treated me Ever so bad

The thought of you Puts a smile on my face And lets my life continue At the most perfect pace

Your with her And happy as hell And even though it hurts me I wish you both well

I dont plan on being in your memory much longer Dying each second As the pain gets stronger

So when I close my eyes When I draw my last breath Just remember that I love you And I love you to death

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Answer #1

hmm how do I put this… in my very professional poet opinion.. Most excelently done! You let the feelings flow without letting them consume you, doing this youkeep your focus (score of 10) You are probably a cosmic as cosmics typically never loose love and even when left alone are still able to give all of themselves to the one they still love. You gave that very well indeed. I have a feeling ifyou close your eyes and breathe you could write some magnificent non ryming poetry as well. Most excelent!

Thomas

Answer #2

awe this is a sweet poem and im sry if this happened to you

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