What do yall think of these two poems be honest?

~the first one is titled after your gone the second one is called What happen after the party led to your death!!~ I think I found you but I lost you in a flash you were gone why do I feel this way in my heart I wanted you to stay but with the magic he has over me and you when it was time to go to tell you the truth I wasnt surprised but I was when you steped away what was I to say?was I supose to yell at the great and the sky above risk my life like juliet in love cross the seas to save those in need bite the apple of peace and harmony to kill the good in all between where did you go what kind of question is that?I know where you went when it ended the day did you mean to leave oh hell no I dont blame you it was your time to go when its my time I’ll see you there and after your gone for the years ahead will I fall in love again maybe but when its my time and were side by side I will know the love that I dare not hide the love we shared before you went away the love we shared in that bed that day the love we shared when you kissed me in the rain the love we shared when you were in pain the love we shared after you said goodbye the love we share now while were side by side.

what did he do to you last night after you left the party did he yell scream of act real naughty did he throw you down again make you hit you head or did he do it hisself this time do you still hear the banging in your head when your laying in bed did he force you to have sex or tell you he love you and do it again I know you love him but this has to stop you were once my girl we were like sisters almost then you get with him and your like a ghost only this time you are a ghost im sitting here right now talking to a tomb stone I wish I could have saved you before he took that last swing or atleast stopped him be fore he took that first drink now your both gone and what am I im still here talking to a tomb stone..I must go now but before I do I will never ever forget you the way you laughed at completely nothing the way you smiled when you saw a puppy and the way you talked about your future I would have though you would be a big producer thats what you said when I first met you you were allway looking towards the future but really now I have to go cause sitting here talking to a tomb stone isnt gonna bring you back to the life you had before that first smack.before that first hid.before that first bump.before that first excuse.before your final rest.