Poem I wrote... thoughts?

You’re gonna have to break down the door, ‘Cause I won’t let you in, Reach out your hand, And pull me from this ravine, But you’ll find you can’t, Cause my heart is submarine.

You say there is sun, Behind the endless grey, You try to take my hand, So we can run away, Into the sunset, Or until dawn, But I can’t run, For in my paw there’s a thorn.

Soon you will find, The grass on this side is just as brown, And you get up, Leaving me here on the ground, Realising; I’m not the same boy you once loved, Clouds have formed, Blocking all traces of the sun above, The same clouds don’t stop you, From touching the sky, ‘Cause even in your lowest low, You’re higher than my highest high.

Answer #1

very nice. sad but not too sad. and not trying to be way too deep. nicely put together.

Answer #2

Awwee I liked it a lot very beautiful…touching(:

Answer #3

I like it. It has a lot of meaning

Answer #4

haha You make me laugh lol Im not white for the last time…look im done you can still sit here and post sh*t but whatever I dont know you you dont know me so what the use in fighting…? Im done this is dumb…

Answer #5

You damn right Im NOT white Im australian And Mexican and Iam hard I aint gotta have a name like 5starbytch to let people know IAM a bytch and Im the badest bytch you will ever meet…Oh and say what you wanta say all I know is you a HATER

Answer #6

I aint gotta be BLACK to be a b*tch okay…Oh and Learn how to spell dumbass…

Answer #7

5starbytch…stfu you little bytch…dont be hatin…becoz you cant write like that…

Answer #8

Its cool ;) I like it but maybe one day in a while come back to it and see if there is anything you want to change… no im not saying its bad or that I dont like it I think it is great!!!

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