Another of my poems

People have said this is my best poem, but I am not so sure. I wouldn’t mind some constructive criticism.

Speakers on full blast, Seemingly emitting ear-splitting Silence Drowned out by the noise of thoughts, Swirling, bouncing around our head, Screaming to be heard. Kept inside, it builds up, Waiting for the moment. One too many, It bursts out Too much energy… too soon The sound is silenced before it reaches the lips, An amplifier turned off. Closed to the world A life blown out

It’s titled Heart Attack.

Thankyou for reading, Britz

Answer #1

its a little, strange

Answer #2

Again, simply beautiful!

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