A poem I wrote about celebrities

Please let me know what you think.

CELEBRITY

So desperate So eager just wanting to be her. “She’s a btch” “She’s a slut” So why do you give a fck - what she does what she wears? You’ll continue to stare at the rich girl wearing heels, unaware how she feels. All the lights in her face capturing moments of disgrace. Not knowing whats’s inside. Not caring that she cries. No idea that it’s true

All she wants

is to be you.

Answer #1

Thats actually a really truthful poem :) well dun!

Answer #2

very good, only it reminded me of your other one too much. it seems like your shooting for a specific rhythm rather than focusing on your subject. its very enjoyable though, but you should make all your work differant as possible. make each one completely unique if you can. (just my opinion) other than that your an amazing writer :)

Answer #3

It’s a good poem I like it, but I don’t agree with the message…

Answer #4

Ohhh tres bien!

Answer #5

I like it but I don’t think it can be directed at all celebrites because some are not like that, but none the less it’s a great poem.

Answer #6

Y’know, I originally wrote it without a title or specific target - I was going to make it about the ‘popular’ girl at school that people gossip about but thought it was a bit lame and immature to do that. I know it’s not exactly a true msg but it’s the best a could do for what it is :)

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