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my hearts always wants the unreal. wishing for something Idon’t want to feel. those words falling on my hopeful ears. but bringing back my biggest fears. I want to give everything for him. He’s won my heart and soul. always treating my like a gem. He can almost fill that emoty hole. but what I want can never be. for if I take it what will happen to me? to many secrets, I can’t fight what I feel. I know what I want can never be real. so it’s back to square one. we were over before we even begun. though I want to change this, it’s an inevitable ending. And now my heart will never finish mending… this about the losing someone I love and being terrified to love someone like that again. and about someone else who comes along and fills the empty space I had, but knowing I can never be with him because my life would be ruined and my world would come crashing down on me. and now I’ve pushed him away and he can’t finish sewing my heart that ripped at the seams back together.

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Answer #1

Pretty good. I think some of your spelling is the only thing that needs to be corrected. I thought it sounded great though! Cheers.

Mama K

Answer #2

wow thats deep lol it was fantabulous!

Answer #3

THATS DEEP AND ITS EXCELLANT

Answer #4

Its Good and from the heart but I kinda got lost.

Answer #5

ya I say thats a preety good poem

Answer #6

thanks!! I never really thought that was deep but thanks anyway!! you guys rock!! haha

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