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is this poem ok?

not one of my best but poem I wrote,,,

the return

with ocean blue skies send shivers down my spine has they remind me of you with your twinkling eyes

for days without you is centuries in my life I guess you can tell im not taking it well

now I lay awake wishing for god sake you will come home one day

for your arms are my home and your appearance is my wish wouldnt that be nice just one more kiss…

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Answer #1

Very Beautiful:)

Answer #2

I love it! it’s beautiful.

Answer #3

very nice:)

Answer #4

ya I have to agree it is pretty perfect and I do luv it!! =]

Answer #5

oh. my. god. you have no idea how much that was like straight from my life. I can totally relate I love it its fantastic!!! oh my gosh its so ironic how perfect it is hahaha

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