What should I change or leave the same about this?

This a song I wrote a while back. I would to know not only what you think but what I can change to make it better. Support our troops! 

V1)  grab your bullets and grab your guns not a day goes by you don’t save someone take a life to save more lives follow your orders with no question why even if you don’t know how praise to the troops on the frontlines now

chorus) all gave some some gave all they lay themselves on the line even when their own country stalls when they fight they fight for us all the beaten and the broken and even the ones who  go off and mock them all

V2) Tell me today Aren’t they the ones Who climb on mountains o bodies They didn’t want to make What price do you pay To have your freedom fought for But you take anothers away They fight for u  But some of you fight against them  You gotta support them  Support our troops

Repeat chorus)

Bridge) when a baby cries you roll your eyes but he sees broken bodies and remembers why he fights you hear jokes about the war  and men like him he hears gunfire bombs and the screams of the innocent you sit there and gossip about everyone of your friends but he has the understanding  he may never see his again their honor and respect is more than true just think how they see themseves inside of you

repeat chorus)

Answer #1

it was asome you must really respect them and all that all I can say is wow

Answer #2

Brilliant, I love the fact that you show the variation of views between the people that are being defended and the people that are getting defended =)

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