What ddo you think about this song?

Sorry I had to put two D’s to make it not go to ann old question and say, “This question is already answered!” Ughh stupid. Anyway I wrote this song for my band called Blind Jump (thats the band name lol). I should tell you about the band first, or else you would think I’m Kuh-Razi! Ok we are a rock/scremo kind of band and all of our songs are really odd but hard to desipher, so yeah… The name of this one is called, “Pixies-Ashes” (I’m going to make (.) to be like the rest beat in between because thats really important in the song.

Pixies .. Ashes .. Blood and tears . Take me away! Take me away! Take me away! Take me away!

Close your eyes Dry my tears Take a breath Steal my fears

Burn my heart Black and Charred You my love, Saw just the start

Bleed my arms See magic and charms, Burn the pixies Ashes to charred

Take me away! Take me away! Take me away! Take me away!

Don’t cry my love, You are just fine Question is, What about I?

Close your eyes Dry my tears Take a breath Steal my fears

The End is near I made through Question is, What about you

Take me away! (low background scream it) Take me away! (scream a little bit louder) Take me away! (SCREAM) Take me away. (sing softly-one vocal)