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How is my poem?

I remember, back years ago, Holding your hand, and not letting go. Now that your gone, theres nothing to touch Nothing as soft, nothing close as much I talk to the angels, and pray on my knees Daddy come back to me, please please please Now it’s all over, nothing alive, all I can do is cry and sigh Listening to that soft music touches my heart But even though you aren’t hear, we aren’t apart No I can’t see you, no I can’t touch But just thinking about you, yes is enough You are my body, my soul, my dad And that’s the way it will always be, even if it’s too sad

I wrote that when I was like 12. Eh?

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Answer #1

I love it, it seems really true. It’s sad though. Good job! I would love to hear what you think about my poems (I have about five posted on this site)

Answer #2

its pretty good that has potetiol of like rap song or just a song

Answer #3

I really like it (: ! erin x

Answer #4

that’s waaayyy good for a 12 year old

great f*ckin’ job!!!

Answer #5

ZOMG! I wish I was as goo as you right now, when you were 12! It always takes me forever to start a good poem. Its golden!!

Answer #6

I LIKE IT I GIVE IT A 8 LOL GOOD JOB POOKA :D

Answer #7

I love it.

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