poem!

Jaysus I didn’t know you were only 14! In that case, pretty good for your age. My apologies. But I just tell it like it is with poetry I’m a harsh judge, but I don’t mean to offend. But your poem is like others, very similar to ones I’ve seen in terms of structure and subject matter. Find your own poetic voice, and best of luck.

It’s awesome!!! I would never have guessed you’re only fourteen. Just one piece of advice: maybe don’t try quite so hard with the vocabulary, I mean, just let the words flow naturally, like when you’re talking; try to make it a little less “wordy”, if you know what I mean. Definitely keep writing poems! Good Luck!

umm hold up im only 14 on my sisters account so your kinda bein a lil harsh…but when you say u’ve seen a lot worse your callin my poem bad and I dats kinda rude but you have you own opinion…and my poem is like no other so please dont compare mine…

-Yonna

vocabulary is very impressive and I have to disagree, I thought it was fabulous, I used to be ableto relate when I loved my boyfriend (now ex) it was really good, I thought it flowed nicely and definitly had a lot of meaning, good job :)

Wow, it has a lot of passion. I think it’s amazing.

Its a bit OTT in terms of subject matter, quite derivative, but I’ve read a lot worse all the same.

Vocabulary is impressive, but the structure and rhythm are unsatisfactory.