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poem!!!

here it is, b honest please!!

I stumb;e through the darkness, I just cant find the light. I hear myself screaming.. it echoes through the night. I feel my fingers shaking, I see no other way. as I stand here alone, I know im here to stay. my heart is beating fast, as I know im truly lost. and im myself I wander, ill stop at my own cost. so ill just keep going, but no one knows where. but it really doesnt matter, because no one seems 2 care.

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Answer #1

yeah that amazing . I love it you schould write a book of poems and publish it

Answer #2

The poem itself is very good. The only thing I would change would be the punctuation. And I wouldnt repeat the “but” twice in the last few lines as it sounds repetitive. I’d change it to:

I stumble through the darkness, I just cant find the light. I hear myself screaming; It echoes through the night. I feel my fingers shaking, I see no other way. As I stand here alone I know im here to stay. My heart is beating fast, As I know im truly lost And I’m myself; I wander, I’ll stop at my own cost. so I’ll just keep going, But no one knows to where. It really doesnt matter Because no one seems to care.

Just the slight changes make it flow a little better, although there was nothing wrong with how it was.

Answer #3

I like it…a lot

Answer #4

I like it

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