What do you think of my worship song?

…I guess when your subject is “Jesus” you can’t really come up with something original.

1. Eliminate the commas - they’re unnecessary.

2. “And yet we tend to drift away from You” is an exceptionally awkward line. It’s out of place. Change it.

3. Meh. The whole thing just doesn’t fly.

Very well done! Did you know that Christianity was originally called “The Way”? In the book of Acts, the term “Christian” first came to used at Antioch. It would be nice to hear a MP3 of this!

Personally, I think it’s very good. Set to music, I’m sure it will flow just fine. (And no one will hear the commas.) :-)

come on guys help me out here

It sounds really good to me. The only thing I could think of that maybe you could change is during the chorus where you have And I, Oh Oh I I’ll follow Your way change to And I, Oh Oh I’ll follow your way because you don’t need the extra I in there since I’ll is I will. Also during the second chorus where you have Yes, I Oh I, I ‘ll follow your ways change to Yes, I Oh I’ll follow your ways because again you don’t need so many I’s in the verse.

haha thanks guys!!! and i’ll fix those changes…

it goes to music…

Not bad at all does it go with a tune or does it have it’s own?