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My poem ""WHY??""

Why have I done this too my life?? Alienated and alone are how I feel, is it that I am afraid to love ? , Cant get close ? , hate people?, Maybe I should??? NEVER COWARDS!!! Now I see its not going to change me , Try if you like others have failed , My mother has failed , I am me , I love me , But I need People …

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Answer #1

& the spelling.

Answer #2

I think thats a really good poem :)

Answer #3

Thanks nwms20013

I wrote it about 10 years ago I was in a bad place but im a lot better now but like to look back on it if I am having a bad day I remindas me things could be a lot worse ya’know.

Answer #4

its really good…I write poems and I hate when people say it sux or something because it came from my heart and no one can take that awayy… :)

Answer #5

No, it isnt a good poem, it needs a lot of work and you dont just put flying commas everywhere. You dont put spaces inbetween them either.

You need to change the wording.

Answer #6

Mkkk…intresting. Revision: Why have I done this to my life? I’m alienated; alone.

Why is it that I’m afraid to love? that I hate the people who walk by?

I can’t get close but maybe I should.

Try if you like; others have failed. Like my mother, who’s in the bathroom; crying.

Now I see; they can never change me.

I am me. I love myself. but… I need to change.

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