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Is this Good Poem??

Darkness

Darkness so thick you could cut it with a knife Words so cruel I wanted to end my life Thoughts so deadly whirling through my mind I couldn’t find happiness of any kind

Blind I was, to the people who care I always thought that no one was there But squinting through my tears I saw a light And I blinked once, seeing through the night

I looked harder and that faint little glow I saw in amazment, started to grow I slowly laid down the silvery blade And wondered if maybe I would be okay

I finally saw what I before couldn’t see And I finally saw nothing was wrong with me A faint smile crept across my tear stained face And for the first time in a while I knew my true place

Through the darkness I saw the light shine And knew that happiness could again be mine

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Answer #1

I thought that it was a very good concept shown through steps. It began rather abruptly, which was fine, and it evolved into a strong point. I believe that I understood what you were saying in this poem: that someone (in this case, you) were sad, depressed, considering suicide, until something changed and went right in your life, and you saw that there was still hope.

 In my opinion, there are two things that should happen in a poem of any kind: either the reader should understand what you're saying, or it should make them wonder and consider what you could mean. If I was correct in the previous paragraph, then I think you wrote with the first of the two: allowing the reader to know what you're saying by making it clear.
 Very good job. Keep writing.
Answer #2

its awfully depressing but its really is touching in a weird kind of way…

I do drama and I would definately use that as a piece if I had the option its quite a talent you have there

Answer #3

WOW. THATS REALLY GOOD!

Answer #4

I like it.

Concrete. Beautiful. Expressive!

*:D

Answer #5

yea it rocks!

Answer #6

that was…AWESOME lol. it really was!!

Answer #7

Ooo yup, it’s interesting ^^

Answer #8

That’s really good. You have talent

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