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Is it a Good Poem??

Ok well this was my english homework and I dont if im going to ge a good grade off of this…Please read and comment hope you’’ll like it=)

My Crush I have these feelings, deep inside feelings that I have to hide I don’t know if he feels the way too And I don’t know what to do When we’re together, I feel uptight When he’s around I feel so right I dream about what we can do And all the things we can pursue I yearn just to feel his touch And when he leaves, I miss him so much I want to feel his lips against mine And feel our bodies intertwine So for now I’ll love him from afar One day I’ll express how special you are So until then I will retain this rush And until then I’ll contain my crush.

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Answer #1

great! it’s got a nice beat to it. only thing. ‘I don’t know if he feels the way too’ I think ‘I don’t know if he feels this way too’ would work better. other than that I could not fault it. well done

Answer #2

def but I think in the 7th line when you say I feel so right maby it shuld be it feels so right but I don’t know your prob older than me but I love it!

Answer #3

Love it. Really cute. I have a guy that I feel this way about. Haha.

Answer #4

your a cheat I found this poem on a website!!!

Answer #5

Thanks=)

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