Can someone give me tips on this song?

can someone give me tips about how to make this song sound anymore odd and irrelevent to anything please? I’m trying to make this song sound as odd and weird as possible. I haven’t named it yet so an odd name would be nice too please!

Here I am Sitting on the edge of a lake waiting to fall in Death swarms down like a thousand birds seeking to carry me on his wings And where we was We’d never ever’d like to return to again Fighting through the forest and hinting on the edge of the beast

Baby I hate to complain but… we’re in the deep end and I’m drowning Baby I hate doing this but… I need to hold on. God, where’s my life support?

Who they knew To be the ones to carry away a life To reach and grasp the fact that life isn’t supposed to turn out this way When you were The only person that I could never see You were always hiding right behind my gaze till you showed a face again

Baby I hate to complain but… I swear to god that you’re killing me Baby I hate doing this but… I’m letting go and you should’ve known

We…We…We should have known

We…We…We should have stopped (x2)

I swear That I’ve! Been trapped behind these eyes for far too long! I swear! That you’ve! Known about this problem of mine for far too long!

I needed this more then you thought they did If only I could have seen that us wasn’t my choice If only we could have swam away before the shore swallowed us up Baby it’s not like it was sink or swim when you were dead Baby it’s not like life and death when it’s the two of us drowning (One more night of this and I was about to sleep anyways)

Answer #1

Can’t think of any tips to give on making it more strange (I don’t really think it’s strange, it makes sense to me), but maybe a title:

H2Overit Go Figure

Blub

Answer #2

WOW that is great… I wish I could write songs like that. what’s the tune? or is it like country, rap.. ETC

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