Do you like this poem?

I wrote another poem. I am not sure if it is good are not. Please tell me if you like it or not.

Trapped in a room
Left here to die
I’m screaming out my final cries
The shackles rough that bind my feet
I wish I had something to eat
Deprived of water food and air
I live my life without a care
I’ve sunken into great despair
The pain is brutal
The hours long
All I do is sing this song
Day after day
Night after night
I continue to try and put up a fight
The chains are coarse
I feel remorse
I cannot go on any longer
No matter what I say or do
I cannot become any stronger
The weight of this burden is crushing my soul
When I look inside I see a black hole
A hole that is dark, consuming and grim
I pull out a knife and everything dims

Please give suggestions. Thank You.

it's really good. I love it!

Nice and dark...

omg! I LOVE this poem. I read your other poemes to. I also LOVED them to! you are a great poem writer!

thats awsome really like life my life anyways

hmmm... some of the lines are a bit ...blunt.., if ya get me...

I LOVE this poem! it simplifies my life. you should be a dark poet. you know, one of those anonymous ones. all of your poems are really good.

I like your wordchoice and your descriptions. It was all very clear. Good job. FunMail me for my poems sometime. They're pretty smilar.