Comment on my poem, please.

Chewing gum and paper bags wherever I go Someday, gunna take it slow Patience comes to the pretty Concentration comes to them too sometimes you drop dead half way through but only that luck, goes to you

Answer #1

It was allright - you could definatly build off of that. Just keep brainstorming and use this as a rough draft and I think you could come up with something great.

Answer #2

its quite good, maybe you should go into more detail, or use better vocabulary ? (: apart from that its good :) x

Answer #3

it sucks sorry but it does.

Answer #4

not my type ov topic but it was ok

Answer #5

it was great

More Like This
Ask an advisor one-on-one!
Advisor

Poems Please

Literature, Arts & Humanities, Education

Advisor

Shopnobilap

Literature, Online Publishing, Community

Advisor

Diamond Nail Supplies

Nail Supplies, Beauty Essentials, Salon Equipment

Advisor

Interior Jumbo

Interior designers in Chennai

Advisor

Kyle Derek Ervin's Story

Books, Faith and Spirituality, Personal Development